Monday, September 14, 2009

Extra Credit 2

"Serving one purpose: to annihilate all and any trace of the truth."
To me, this sentence does not make very much sense. I don't even think it's grammatically correct. I would start out by having a subject, and removing the colon. Also, the word annihilate just does not fit in with the tone of the story.
I would say:
"Their only purpose here is to eliminate all and any trace of the truth."

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